Much better on the skin tone, although if you want, you could put him in the shadows a bit and use the light of the torn world as your source but it looks awesome. I like how you darkened the inside and left it bright for the border.
The quote is good but how it's broken up is confusing. Slap a comma in there after 'lies'. I think that'll make more sense.
Could add some highlights to his right shoulder. Trick with that is doing 'inner shadow' and adjusting its direction and color.
The text looks good. Very simple. It looks like it's missing something but couldnt tell you what =D
