Husband/Wife Magelo

Have been staring at this way - way - way too long... Crits please... I would ideally not like to go back in and re-pose / render, but will if I have too.

And btw... Heyas, its been a while since I posted! :)

looks nice , cute pose hehe I like your little swirly ribbon stuff ya got in there. Which pants are those? They look so high and hurtfull =/ hehe not thats thats any of your doing :P

looks nice , cute pose hehe I like your little swirly ribbon stuff ya got in there. Which pants are those? They look so high and hurtfull =/ hehe not thats thats any of your doing :P

I couldnt get them any lower =( and its the pants that came with M3 Tunic

I couldnt get them any lower =( and its the pants that came with M3 Tunic

Well, I really do think you should go back and repose. This is why - the pose itself looks really unnatural. Did you try doing it with your hubbo? I have a hard time trying to picture myself doing it (although i wish i had those legs, yo!). The way his body is turned and how she's "sitting" on his hip but there's nothing there on his slim hips to hold her. But if you don't want to redo the pose...

Their hands look like they're floating. Her right hand on his head in particular looks like it's hovering, not even touching his hair or shadows. His right hand, again on 'top' of her calf rather than gripping it and again no shadow. Her left hand looks like its doing something a little naughty :teehee

You could try postworking his pants down a bit, but they do look like they're tights which maybe the look you're going for. I hate hate hate cuffed tail hair on men. So that's more preference, but the loose bits on the top never make sense to me. Postworking the strands longer would look better. It's got to be the most unattractive hair out there =/ His ponytail looks like 2 different pieces of hair coming out the bottom. The color doesn't match and it looks like the right piece is overlapping it. Same with the hair under his ear, it seems out of place and too bright. Her hair is nice but it looks flat above her forehead.

The swirls pull it together alright, it matches the text which is nice. Your lighting seems off as well. You have pink light which looks like moonlight coming from the right to left, but the moon is behind him to the left so it would make more sense for it to go left to right. If it's coming from the swirls, it still doesn't make sense, it should be going up and down since you have the pink on the bottom.

It's a nice background. You have a lot of nice elements but it doesn't really look organized, if that makes sense. I do like the text quite a bit though. Hope that helps. =)

Well, I really do think you should go back and repose. This is why - the pose itself looks really unnatural. Did you try doing it with your hubbo? I have a hard time trying to picture myself doing it (although i wish i had those legs, yo!). The way his body is turned and how she's "sitting" on his hip but there's nothing there on his slim hips to hold her. But if you don't want to redo the pose...

Their hands look like they're floating. Her right hand on his head in particular looks like it's hovering, not even touching his hair or shadows. His right hand, again on 'top' of her calf rather than gripping it and again no shadow. Her left hand looks like its doing something a little naughty :teehee

You could try postworking his pants down a bit, but they do look like they're tights which maybe the look you're going for. I hate hate hate cuffed tail hair on men. So that's more preference, but the loose bits on the top never make sense to me. Postworking the strands longer would look better. It's got to be the most unattractive hair out there =/ His ponytail looks like 2 different pieces of hair coming out the bottom. The color doesn't match and it looks like the right piece is overlapping it. Same with the hair under his ear, it seems out of place and too bright. Her hair is nice but it looks flat above her forehead.

The swirls pull it together alright, it matches the text which is nice. Your lighting seems off as well. You have pink light which looks like moonlight coming from the right to left, but the moon is behind him to the left so it would make more sense for it to go left to right. If it's coming from the swirls, it still doesn't make sense, it should be going up and down since you have the pink on the bottom.

It's a nice background. You have a lot of nice elements but it doesn't really look organized, if that makes sense. I do like the text quite a bit though. Hope that helps. =)

You could render him once with them and once without so that you have a naked version underneath once you lower the pants if that is how you wish to go with them. I agree they do look like tights, which is helped by the very bright green colour of them and felt looking texture. Perhaps you can darken the green in the material room or post work them darker if you prefer.

I would post work some shadows like Mae suggested also because they do look like they are not quite touching.

As far as the pose goes I just figured she was floating *shrug* I ran around constantly with Spirit of Eagles on so perhaps I assume everyone floats.

As far as his hair goes I like the cuffed tail but then maybe its cause I have messy long hair and am happy to see stray wisps on other people's also. You could add some realism to it by adding some shadow where it touches his skin, just a little to show some over lap.

You could render him once with them and once without so that you have a naked version underneath once you lower the pants if that is how you wish to go with them. I agree they do look like tights, which is helped by the very bright green colour of them and felt looking texture. Perhaps you can darken the green in the material room or post work them darker if you prefer.

I would post work some shadows like Mae suggested also because they do look like they are not quite touching.

As far as the pose goes I just figured she was floating *shrug* I ran around constantly with Spirit of Eagles on so perhaps I assume everyone floats.

As far as his hair goes I like the cuffed tail but then maybe its cause I have messy long hair and am happy to see stray wisps on other people's also. You could add some realism to it by adding some shadow where it touches his skin, just a little to show some over lap.

Thanks Mae and Mai...

I tried doing what was suggested... As for the actual pose, it was hand picked by the cleric and I tweaked it as much as possible to get hands to look as tho they are touching without actually colliding...

So.. Here is the version with added shadows- New background, to hopfully work with the lighting better... Um.. I dont know what to do to make her bangs look less flat no matter what I do, it looks really screwed up.

More CC? Gonna work on it more tomorrow - :)

Thanks Mae and Mai...

I tried doing what was suggested... As for the actual pose, it was hand picked by the cleric and I tweaked it as much as possible to get hands to look as tho they are touching without actually colliding...

So.. Here is the version with added shadows- New background, to hopfully work with the lighting better... Um.. I dont know what to do to make her bangs look less flat no matter what I do, it looks really screwed up.

More CC? Gonna work on it more tomorrow - :)

Just admit it you lev'd her and its all good.

My room mate was a rogue that hated being lev'd so a ranger friend would do run by leving on him whenever possible.

Just admit it you lev'd her and its all good.

My room mate was a rogue that hated being lev'd so a ranger friend would do run by leving on him whenever possible.

Is what you have pretty much what the client wants now at this point? Otherwise the corrections look decent. Anything else I'd add would be more preference.

Is what you have pretty much what the client wants now at this point? Otherwise the corrections look decent. Anything else I'd add would be more preference.

Hit me with preference =P

Hit me with preference =P

My preference would be to change the pose. :blush There's a package out there that has couple poses - I think Vali puts it out...on renderosity? I'd have to double check.

My preference would be to change the pose. :blush There's a package out there that has couple poses - I think Vali puts it out...on renderosity? I'd have to double check.

little things about the pose that bug me.. why is she holding up her own ass? put in the tips of her fingers like she's touching him maybe? and his hand.. maybe erase the tip of his thumb so it looks like his hand is going to hold her leg?

Also the chainmail on her chest seems VERY flat.. I think you should add some dodge / burn to give it more depth, and some shadows